一篇雅思作文习的一个具体的分析

　　在此通过自己的一篇雅思作文习作来进行一个具体的分析。顺带说明，此文章考官Martin Renner 评价为： It's very well written with next-to-no errors.
　　真题重现
　　Research indicatesthat the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on ourpersonality and development than any experiences we may have in our life.
　　Which do you consider to be the major influence?
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　　Admittedly, the inborn characteristicswe have impose influence on our personality and development to someextent. From my point of view, however, the experiences we go through in life, education andwork outweigh the characteristics in terms of shaping our personality. To make my claim more convincing, I list three arguments as follows.
　　诚然，先天的特性会在一定程度上影响我们的人格和发展。但是，以我之见，就塑造人格而言，我们在生活、教育和工作中的经历所起的作用更大。为了使我的观点更加具有说服力，我在这里列出了三个理由。
　　As aproverb says life is the best teacher , we constantly draw on our lifeexperience to improve ourselves. For example, hardships and setbacks make usmore psychologically strong;getting along with people teaches us how to be socially appealing and getting marriedand bringing up our offspring awards us a sense of responsibility. Almost every element in, or facet of, life contributes to the formation ofour personality.
　　正如一句谚语所言---- 生活是最好的老师 。我们经常会使用生活中的经历来提升自己。例如，困苦与挫折会让我们心理上更加坚强;与人相处会教会我们如何成为一个社交上受欢迎的人;结婚、抚育子女会赋予我们责任感。生活中的每一个元素或方面都会有助于我们人格的形成。
　　Inaddition to life, education--from pre-school to tertiary education--also playsa vital role in the development of personality as it helps build up one s career path and life trajectory. During the process of learning, one can broaden his or her horizon through grasping knowledge and or skills in various disciplines, and consequently develop his or her traits and attributes, such as creativity, critical thinkingand troubleshooting capacity. These are all essential constituents of one s personality and arefairly difficult to acquire from inborn characteristics.
 
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